Julie Patton/ Essay Packet

In Julie Patton's performance interview, the words that decided to say very creative. It was very hard to understand at some points because she wanted to exaggerate the answers to an easy question. Of course, once again, I really did not like it. Usually if its something like that to read, it was hard to comprehend and hard to get through it all. I did think that her structure was part of her performance in terms of her language. In the written format, the structure was inconsistent in terms of her language because she would use Ebonics followed by the rest of the words in the sentence to be grammatically correct. As with why she chose to use them may add to the performance of the interview itself. I was also trying to understand her purpose of doing this performance based on her personality or perspective that influenced this piece. She seemed to have some knowledge previously known to the philosophy to art and the way she describe how it is supposed to be (whether if she was right or wrong) sounded correct based on the way she chose to describe it to the audience. In this performance interview she is able to grab the imagination of the audience so they can get an idea of what she is talking about in the interview.


I also chose to read some of the paragraphs and critique it based on my own personal knowledge. I graded it based on skill, content, and creativity, all of which was not present in all pieces. Some where inconsistent with writing style and the content within it. The ones that i did enjoy reading was based on how consistent the subject was in the story that was provided. Some were so hard to grade that it was impossible to tell what the author was really trying to portray within the essays. So far I have about six or seven critique for some of the essays in the packet. This is what I have from it so far, according to my own understanding.


Red an Invocation-A mom describes the whisking tail of a fox and a supposedly dead hawk that she does not draw attention to her son. She sees the hawk and describes it as a “blood-dried-in-air” color and also distinctive in saying the hawk was nothing like you have ever seen before. Overall the essay is short, very creative to the point it is hard to understand. I do not understand her purpose in the story that was told.

Sunday-Very funny indeed, in a way I can kind of relate. The story explains what kinds of foods are cooked, how they are cooked and how it would be eaten by this particular minority population. The story is based on the narrator’s opinion making the story subjective, offensive, and stereotypical.

Mint Snowball -Very visual and to the point. The point was the reminiscing of the young child’s mother’s memory.

Mute Dancers: How to Watch a Hummingbird-Very informational. The problem is that when writing in literal terms, the writing language must be consistent in order to be considered that type of work. This piece was mixed with literal technicality along with creativeness; creativeness that in a way did not relate to the specific topic.

Farder to Reache-In a way hard to understand, the use of quotes were in good placing, but the fact that the essay really did not have an absolute topic is the part that is confusing. The essay focused more on trying to connect different persons and concepts together rather than letting them all connect and follow under one subject.

The Fine Art of Sighing-The story is incomplete but the first paragraph grabs hold of the reader and draws them into a visionary procedure in which the narrator explains how the sigh is made and the metaphors that connect with it. Very strong beginning.

Latin: Fama-Very confused. Point is not made within this piece.

Door No. Five-A list of books probably relating to one another.

Notes Toward the Making of a Whole Human Being:- This was really not an essay, nor was it notes. Out of a story that takes up about four pages, this work only had one period, relying on semicolons, colons commas, quotations marks, etc, and ...'s. These quotation marks made the work, not much of the author's own dialogue was used here. The author at the beginning does go on in detail but this whole piece is one continuous sentence of many complex and simple sentences; citations from other works and books and a splash of the author's own ideas, but not much.